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In today's job market it is far more important to have practical skils than theoretical knowledge. In the future, job applications may not need any formal qualifications. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, apart from theoretical
knowledge
 other practical skills are
also
 required to remain sustained in
this
job
 market. Some people think that in the future formal qualifications may not be needed to get a
job
. I do not agree with
this
 statement and
further
 in
this
 essay, I will explain my point of view with some examples from my personal life and experience.
To begin
 with , There is no doubt to survive in
this
 competitive
job
 market
students
 need other skills
such
 as communication and leadership
along with
 a theoretical degree. Practical
knowledge
 gives an immense opportunity for growth in a
job
.
For instance
 , trainee
students
 are easily absorbed by the clients because of their practical
knowledge
.
Secondly
 , Many jobs are available in the market but without a degree,
students
 are not supposed to apply to these positions like software engineer ,regulatory pharma ,doctor etc.
Moreover
, it is necessary for them to know theoretical terms
such
 as coding for engineers, formulas for scientists and depth of theoretical
knowledge
 about medicine for doctors to treat patients.
For example
 ,
Students
 can not become doctors on the basis of practical
knowledge
 theoretical exams should be clear
then
 only pupils are eligible for practical experience.
To conclude
 , I believe theoretical
knowledge
 plays an important role in student's life to enhance their
knowledge
. I would say that both are important whether it is theoretical or practical
knowledge
.
firstly
 , the theoretical concepts should be clear
then
 only practical
knowledge
 would help in immense growth in a career.
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grammar
Ensure consistent use of articles (e.g., 'students need other skills' should be 'students need other skills such as…').
support
Provide more specific examples or data to support your points for a stronger argument.
cohesion
Smoothen transitions between paragraphs to improve flow. Use linking words like 'Furthermore', 'Additionally', etc.
introduction
Clear and relevant introduction and conclusion, summarizing the main points effectively.
task response
Addressed both practical skills and theoretical knowledge and their importance succinctly.
support
Used personal experience to add depth to the argument, making it more relatable.

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