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The bar chart illustrates information related to the world populace per cent and issuance of
wealth
 by sector. It is clear, that North America has the highest global
wealth
 standing at 32%, followed by Europe & Rich Asia- Pacific contributed by 30- 24 per cent respectively. India and Africa somewhat have similar, global
wealth
 standing by 1 % respectively. We can see that, countries like China, Other Asia-Pacific and America &
Caribean
region including the Caribbean Islands
Caribbean
falling
Suggestion
fall
are falling
 under 5% in
world
Suggestion
worldly
wealth
. Looking to Population, China is the highest among all the countries, standing by 24%, rest other countries those are less populated,
such
 as Africa, America & Caribean, North America and Rich-Asia Pacific, which accounted under 10%, It can be observed, that less than fifth countries, who have similar population ratio, are India, Other- Asia pacific & Europe. Overall, in terms of global
wealth
, North America has the highest among all the 8 countries, whereas, the least in India.
However
, the rate of population is the highest in China and lowest in Rich- Asia Pacific. The units are measured in percentages.
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