The advances in air travel are focused only in the first class and this seems to have left others with no benefits at all? Do you agree or dissgree?

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Some think that the
first
class
passengers are given all the advanced technology and comfort during their travel while the other passengers do not get any benefits. In my opinion, I believe that all the innovation and comfort during an air travel is concentrated on the
business
class
seats leaving the other passengers with limited options.
Firstly
, I think that airlines concentrate more
on
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in
first
class
as they pay more
fare
appropriate to; intended for
for
.
In other words
, most of the attention is seeked by
business
class
passengers,
such
as, specially designed seats with back rests, extra leg space, washroom facilities and variety of foods all at the cost of other passengers because the plane size is limited and to get all
this
extra luxuaries for the
first
class
they have to squeeze the economy
class
, which is left with mere crumbled seat and some options of food.
For example
, television is installed along with all desired
channels one
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channels, one
can think of while in a flight, along with
this
, specially designed beds and curtains. Another reason that other passengers in a plane are neglected while they
business
class
advances is the variety of food they get whilst travelling. To illustrate, as the economy passengers only have some options to choose from a
menue
a list of dishes available at a restaurant
menu
, on
contrary
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the contrary
the
first
class
is offered all the courses along with
deserst
a dish served as the last course of a meal
dessert
desserts
,
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,
this
can sometimes be customised,
thus
concentrating on the
luxuary
something that is an indulgence rather than a necessity
luxury
items
,
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,
the aviation industry only provides basic
nessicites
the condition of being essential or indispensable
necessities
to others
.
Accept space
.
Amittedly
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Admittedly
travelling by air has changed and is a better
experience but
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experience, but
mostly for
first
class
. In conclusion, I think that
although
there are few
business
class
seats
in
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on
a flight, still most of the focus of the attendants as well as
the the
definite article
the
flight authorities is on their comfortable journey of its
first
class
rather than
rest
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the rest
of
passengers
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the passengers
.
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