The restoration of old buildings in many cities in the world involve a lot of government expenditures. This money should be used in new housing and road development. To what extent do you agree or disagree

In
this
contemporary era
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where preservation of former buildings which give identity to the nation have become significant for the country. A fraction of society advocates that ministry should allocate huge expenditures to basic human needs
such
as highways and residency. I partially agree with
this
notion which will be justified in upcoming segments with relevant examples.
First
and
formost
ranking above all others
foremost
, in all the
nation
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nations
across the world since few decades traffic congestion has been flourishing by leaps and bounds due to evolution of motor vehicles. By fabricating new roads, there are possibilities to decline traffic flow. To elucidate
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according to
recent survey
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a recent survey
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which was carried out by leading
newspapers illustrated
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newspapers, illustrated
that in
delhi
a city in north central India
Delhi
city proportion of traffic about 10% had decreased in 2018 after developing six lane
roads
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road
. Apart from
this
, in developing countries
such
as
india
a republic in the Asian subcontinent in southern Asia; second most populous country in the world; achieved independence from the United Kingdom in 1947
India
,
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,
sri
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Sri
lanka
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Lanka
, there are plethora of
improverished
poor enough to need help from others
impoverished
people as compared to wealthy individuals, So that, it has become mandatory to build new residency for betterment of poor people. If state government construct new buildings it will lead to collapse percentage of poor citizens
Conversely
, historical buildings help us to connect with our traditions and culture. Infect, maintaining ancient buildings are
excellent way
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an excellent way
to attract international travellers across the world by its marvellous look.
Therefore
, if governments do not ready to reform old bu
ildings which is
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perspective, both
demolished through natural disasters they will face fall down of annual income in tourism sector due to lack of t
our
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in
ists I would like to conclude by saying that according to my perspective both, preservation of old buildings and monuments as well as construction of new highways play equally important role for the overall development of a country
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