Some people think sending criminals to prison is not an effective way to deal with them. Education and training are better. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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These days, the question of whether prisons or

ehabilitation

the restoration of someone to a useful place in society

rehabilitation

programs are better in dealing with offenders has been receiving a great deal of public attention.

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prisons are not without advantages, I strongly believe that

education

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and training are more effective. On the one hand, imprisoning

law-breakers

someone who violates the law

lawbreakers

lawbreakers'

lawbreaker's

can offer several benefits.

Firstly

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, since people are isolated from the society for a long period of time,

this

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allows them time to learn that unlawful actions have consequences.

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, they would not dare to

reoffend

cause to feel resentment or indignation

offend

when being released, bringing peace and safety to the whole community.

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, it is true that serious crimes

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as murderers should be in confined spaces to prevent

further

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life losses. In fact, these criminals may be beyond redemption as they are too cruel to deprive innocent people of their own life.

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Accept space

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deprive

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Deprive

someone of something: tước đi của

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cái gì).

On the other hand

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, rehabilitation projects are of greater importance. (phải khẳng định là nó tốt hơn nha).

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with, for prisoners who have committed petty crime

such

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as burglars or stealing without harming others, vocational training can help them become better citizens later on. In fact, with proper

education

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, these wrongdoers can

accquire

come into the possession of something concrete or abstract

acquire

personal skills and specific job skills which can assist them in entering the job market after being released and start a new life, which is more ethical.

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, it is true that some people commit crime without any awareness, in

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case,

education

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is crucial.

For example

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, in Vietnam, drug dealers tend to induce (dụ dỗ) young children to innocently deliver

drug

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drugs

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means that the lack of

knowlege

the psychological result of perception and learning and reasoning

knowledge

can drive many kids to be guilty;

therefore

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education

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can open a chance for these offenders to be conscious about illegal activities and avoid making the same mistake again. In conclusion, I am of the opinion that the best solution to cope with criminals is to educate and train them to be better residents. By considering the pros and cons of each method, the authority could solve the problem of crime in a short time.

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