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Some people prefer activities and lifestyle in hot climate while others prefer activities and lifestyle in cold climate. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is a fact that humans are really good at adapting to different climates, but the human body has different preference of how much cold or heat it can handle. The reality is that there are some who enjoy warm weather and others tend to choose colder one. With the help of mechanical innovations humans can now control the climate, inside, at least. In my opinion, it is more of psychological factor that influence individuals of their seasonal preferences.
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 with, summer season is always associated for extrovert people. Sunny days
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 a perfect time to do jogging, exercising or just walking in the mall wearing stylish clothes. People who like balmy climate will most likely to arrange activities
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 as a trip down the road, pool parties with friends and relatives. All of these frolicking in summer time. Fortunately, a warmer climate is good
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 health, exercise
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, can strengthen the heart, lower blood pressure and can
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 increase the production of serotonin which can positively affect peoples mood.
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, too much exposure to the sun’s ultraviolet light (UV) is harmful to
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the skin
 that can cause skin damage and skin cancer. So, it is important to know the drawbacks of sun exposure.
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, those who love winter is perceived to be an introvert. Cold weather is always a good excuse to stay home and enjoy indoor activities. Some people prefer cold temperature because they can perform tasks better when the room temperature is cooler than a warmer one.
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, winter months do not require individuals to deal with how presentable and stylish, they are since their body will be covered with thick clothing.
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, there is no pressure of having an attractive body and their self-esteem will boost during those months. In conclusion, seasonal changes can play a major role in how we think, feel and behave. Our individual preferences may be influenced by a wide variety of factors, including psychological and our experiences. If someone grew up enjoying and get excited to play in the snow during snowy days,
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 more likely that person will
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 enjoy winter as an adult.
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