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Some people think that teenage years are the happiest times of most people's life. Others think that adult life brings more happiness in spite of greater responsibilities. discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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There has always been a
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continuing
 debate as to which phase in a person’s life is the most exhilarating. Some opine that the teenage years trump the adult years when it comes to the happiest times, while others believe that despite the responsibilities that come with adulthood, it can still bring more
happiness
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 essay will highlight these differing opinions before a conclusion is made on which is the happier of both. On the one hand, there is a certain amount of freedom that can only be enjoyed during teenage years.
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, during the holidays from school, a teenager can have all the fun they want, no worrying about school work, finances or what
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of them or themselves
their
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 meal will be because they know there will be an adult (parent) making sure that all their needs are catered for.
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 free state of mind allows a teen to indulge in activities that bring
happiness
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, adults find their
happiness
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 from achieving the goals they have set for themselves. A good example would be when a woman buys a car, regardless of the fact that she has to fuel and service that car which would be a recurring duty, there is so much
happiness
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 that comes from achieving that goal of getting something for herself.
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 sort of exhilarating satisfaction
from
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of
 meeting a personal target is
happiness
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. In summary, while I think teenagers enjoy bouts of
happiness
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 because of the freedom they enjoy from a lack of/ little responsibility, I do think that the fulfilment that
ccomes
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c comes
 from
achieveing
to gain with effort
achieving
 an aspired goal that you have worked hard for as an adult, is most rewarding and brings a greater feeling of
happiness
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Adolescence
  • Vibrancy
  • Self-discovery
  • Maturation
  • Fulfillment
  • Life milestones
  • Peer pressure
  • Personal autonomy
  • Financial independence
  • Emotional intelligence
  • Nostalgia
  • Adulting
  • Quarter-life crisis
  • Midlife achievement
  • Existential satisfaction
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