Some people think that government should not spend money on sports stadium and building theatres. Instead it should spend more money on education. Do you agree or disagree.

#people #government #money #sports #stadium #theatres #education

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?

Government has a pivotal role to play in today's world. As there are critics to judge them at every stage.

Thus

Linking Words

this

Linking Words

issue gets more intense as what ruling party should do or what they should not. I do not accord with the notion and

therefore

Linking Words

feel that sports and theatres are equally important. I will discuss both views before coming on to a conclusion.

Firstly

Linking Words

, there is no doubt that the study is important to nourish our generation and to build up their carrier. But, extracurricular activities

such

Linking Words

as sports are equally beneficial to flourish their hidden talent which could definitely provide peers with great opportunities.

Thus

Linking Words

, the law should spend money on building up good infrastructure which includes all basic facilities in it.

Moreover

Linking Words

, it is immensely fruitful for their health as well. As, recently a survey was conducted by "Times now" in India and it was clearly depicted that people who gave equal time to sports are more fit and mentally strong.

Secondly

Linking Words

, there are various celebrities of

this

Linking Words

generation who made their carrier through sports or theatres.

Hence

Linking Words

, a motivation is much required and that can be provided by their parents.

Furthermore

Linking Words

, they could be helpful in polishing the abilities of some children as we never know might be they will be the

Linking Words

big thing in the cinema world. A person should never be restricted from making choices.

Finally

Linking Words

, in conclusion, every peer has a special hidden talent in them and the only thing they need is a push and motivation of their parents and the government. So governments should invest in these sectors equally.

Submitted by Yogesh Sharma on Sat Jul 18 2020

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

for example
for instance
to illustrate this
to give a clear example
such as
namely
to illustrate
take, for example

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

11
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

0123456789.0505

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

270 words

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 & Task 2 checks
Practice with essays, charts, and letters.
Personalized suggestions & mistake analysis
Spot every mistake and boost your score.
Topic ideas & vocabulary helpers
Expand your ideas and use the right words.
Progress tracking
Watch your writing improve with every practice.

Topic Vocabulary:

economic development
socio-economic groups
equal opportunities
harmonious and equitable society
innovation and technological advancements
global competitiveness
holistic development
physical health
stress relief
cultural enrichment
generate revenue
local economy
misuse or inefficient allocation
balanced approach
adequately funded

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

6.5
band
A museum near your home is looking for people to do part-time voluntary/unpaid work. You would like to do some voluntary/unpaid work at the museum. Write a letter to the museum director to apply for the voluntary/unpaid work. In your letter • explain why you want to do voluntary/unpaid work at the museum • describe some skills and qualities you have that would be useful • give details of when you would be available for work
I am writing to express my willingness to apply for this voluntary job posted recently, particularly the security guard that I think is appropriate for me. Regarding my previous work experience and my expertise in this position, I would be highly competent for various reasons.
5.5
band
Question -Your manager has asked you to arrange a party for a colleague leaving the company. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter suggest a suitable date and time for the party recommend a venue propose the food and entertainment options that should be available
I am writing to you for giving an update about Fredy's leaving party. Considering that the last day of work of Fredy is on friday 12 August, we can make the venue on saturday 13 August at four o'colck in afternoon.
4.5
band
Everyone should be encouraged to use fewer resourches rather than reycle more To what extent do you agree with the statement?
Resources is pivotal for everyone; they can use it encouraged rather than recycle more. I support the statement since wood and water are beneficial for people in the world, so people can use it with caution.
7
band
A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. write a letter to your friend. in your letter Explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday. describe some possible disadvantage say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer. Start your letter with Dear …………,
Good to hear from you after a long time. Two days ago I got your mail, mentioning some concerns about your upcoming summer camping. As you know I have been in such summer activities so I can provide you with some tips.
9
band
Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation. Such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both points and express your opinion.
No one can cast a shadow of doubt on the fact that unpleasant situations are inevitable in life and they are difficult to cope with such as financial problems and unrewarding professions. Some say that it is a must to accept these hardships as they are while others believe that there has to be a practical attitude for making more effort to overcome the challenges.I would argue that the second group has a better point of view due to the reasons which will be discussed in the following paragraphs.

Some people think that government should not spend money on sports stadium and building theatres. Instead it should spend more money on education. Do you agree or disagree.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Question -Your manager has asked you to arrange a party for a colleague leaving the company. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter suggest a suitable date and time for the party recommend a venue propose the food and entertainment options that should be available

Everyone should be encouraged to use fewer resourches rather than reycle more To what extent do you agree with the statement?

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation. Such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both points and express your opinion.