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Recreational drugs should be legalized and there should be no punishments for people who use them. To what extent do you agree

#drugs #punishments #people
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The legalization of recreational drugs will undoubtedly have a harmful effect immediately and perniciously.
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, I'm afraid I have to disagree the fact to legalize the recreational
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 Many youngsters who are silently buying the drugs will openly go to the store and purchase. Currently, many teens who are taking drugs are still in limits because of the fear of their parent's relative and fear of the law. After legalization, the immediate adverse impact will fall on youngsters;
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, they become addicted to it in a short span, which will be extremely detrimental to their health, and emotionally shattered their parents.
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, plenty of research describes that when attempting to admit these adolescents for recreational services, the death rates are far more than the cure rate. Legalization will exponentially increase the
drug
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 smuggling. Many
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 mafia will be motivated and smuggle the narcotics around the world at a higher rate.
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,
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 paddlers make a lot of money at the cost of the lives of future generations around the globe, which is detrimental and notorious. It will
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 be poisonous for the patient who is taking control amount of narcotic drugs as they are necessary for their treatment. Many
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 patients are taking opioid and opioid-containing drugs to curb their
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 pain as a palliative treatment. Despite having in extreme agony, these patients are
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 accountable related to their medication records. In the case of legalization, the patient will have liberty and can take opium in a large dose to quickly control their misery because it is agreeable the
cancer
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 pain is the extreme ache that any
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 patient can experience, which is unfortunate.
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, by taking optimal doses due to its radial availability,
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 patients can instantly go into respiratory depression, coma, and death. Ultimately, the recreational drugs' availability should not be legalized;
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, we will not be able to save our young generation, our patients with debilitating
illeness
impairment of normal physiological function affecting part or all of an organism
illness
illnesses
, society, by and large.
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