Each year, the crime rate increases. What are the causes of crime and what could be done to prevent this rise in criminal activity?

#year #crime #rate #increases #rise #activity

These days the number

cof

connects a noun with the preceding word

crime is being more and more.

there

Suggestion

There

are several reasons for

this

and in the following essay

refers to the speaker or writer

am going to give some solutions as well as reasons why criminal activities are being done by several people. Nowadays many countries are developing

countries while

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countries, while

some of them are developed. There are

seveal

(used with count nouns) of an indefinite number more than 2 or 3 but not many

several

differences

among

Suggestion

between

their lifestyle. If we consider in

developed

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developing

countries people are more mature and educated since the poor countries shows

vise

denotes a person or thing

this

vice

verca

. According to BBC's crime

statistics crime

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statistics, crime

rate in developing countries is three times more than rich countries. From these

measurement

Suggestion

measurements

refers to the speaker or writer

can say that

people especially

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people, especially

juvinile

of or relating to or characteristic of or appropriate for children or young people

juvenile

juveniles

from well off states are polite, literate and well brought up.

Suggestion

the other hand, states that are still flourishing have massive not educated and disobeyed youngs. In

such

places parents are usually busy with earning and they

consentrate

gathered together or made less diffuse

concentrated

more on profit rather than spending time with their children and bringing up them well in the future.

As a result

adults

Suggestion

adult

are grown

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is grown

grow

without control. And That careless situation

bring

Suggestion

brings

them to be disruptive boy.

Moreover

, as a less salary given to

teacher

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teachers

the teacher

a teacher

, teachers are not professional at school and they have not taken

rheit

responsibility as a loyal worker for

ones

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one

one's

job. As most solutions of problems can be found, it is possible to find a way to diminish criminal activities in the world. My

first

solution

refer

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refers

to teach

Suggestion

to teaching

parents to give more care than their private business as their kids light family lamp and reflect who they are in the future.

additioonally

Suggestion

Additional

Additionally

Additioonally

government should give enough support for

educadional

relating to the process of education

educational

field and require teachers to be

smatr

showing mental alertness and calculation and resourcefulness

smarter

smart

smoother

to manipulate both students and pupils. All in all, it is possible to decrease criminal activities and it can be accomplished by two main soldiers are parents and teachers

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305 words

4.00

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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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