due to the development and rapid expanision of supermakerts in some countries, many small, local business are unable to complete. Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local commnities. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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Supermarket expansion will be increased daily rather than local shops. I partially agree with

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statement. It is certainly true, the supermarket is more popular in all countries because everything like groceries, vegetables, home furniture, clothes all different products are available in the mart. So people no need to go another place for purchasing other goods.

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the malls automatically attract the customer more.The main advantages of

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shopping mall is buyer enter and pick the products what are they want directly.In festival season they provide discounts on products.

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D-mart, big bazaar is famous supermarkets in our country.Many people have more interest to call

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shopping mall, so these malls are located in many places in Hyderabad.

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, before shopping malls, food shops occupy the many places in towns and cities.

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the retail food store count is decreased, but it is not completely closed because some places like villages, every corner of the street at least one grocery store will be there because some people stop over shops when they want regular basis and immediately required items in that situation they prefer small shops.

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the village people buy the goods in small shops only even though in towns and cities many people vacation near small shops where they live. To conclude, the supermarkets increased rapidly,

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the person's appointment, grocery shops for basic needs. So the small shops does not completely disappear.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

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due to the development and rapid expanision of supermakerts in some countries, many small, local business are unable to complete. Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local commnities. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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