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Some people believe that written communication is much less powerful than face to face interaction when it comes to conveying a message. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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When it comes to communicating and exchanging information, some people believe that
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face
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 interaction is more powerful than written
communication
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. In my point of view, both methods have their own benefit, but it depends on the specific circumstance as to which is the
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 appropriate at that
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. On the one hand, direct meeting is an extremely effective and efficient method of
communication
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 in certain contexts. Verbal
communication
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 allows people to connect emotionally with their listeners.
This
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 helps to convey powerful messages and
inspirations
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with
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 the listeners thanks to the speaker’s emotions, tone of voice and
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body language because emotions are something
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 difficult to express just through writing.
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,
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 interaction is easier to discuss and debate without having to wait for someone else to complete a text.
On the other hand
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, written
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 a convenient form in modern times when we are always busy with work and do not have enough
time
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 to meet each other. Emails and contexts can be written and sent at any
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 we want without having to spend
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 arranging a
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 for a
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-to-
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 meeting.
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, important reports and documents are always required to be written.
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 is why important documents including reports, memos, job descriptions and emails are often kept in written form.
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, legal and regulatory documents are always written rather than spoken. In conclusion, both spoken and written forms of
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 have their own purposes, benefits and drawbacks, and people have to carefully consider which form is suitable to apply in each specific situation.
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