In many countries, people decide to have a child at a later age. Why is this? Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays, it is suggested that a couple should have
children
at a later age.
This
essay will elucidate the reasons for
this
and
although
there are several drawbacks, they are dwarfed by the benefits. To start with, people choose to have
children
later because either they want to have a more stable financial status or to learn more skills of teaching a child.
Firstly
, thinking of having a child after some years of marriage would give them more time to focus on their career.
Accordingly
, they would accumulate more money, thereby spending them on
better growing
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environments
such
as kindergartens or international primary schools.
Secondly
, these parents could
also
learn about how to teach a baby before having one. By acquiring certain knowledge in teaching their
offsprings
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, they would be more confident when it comes to lecturing
children
.
For instance
, upbringing courses in Vietnam are increasing considerably to educate future parents about those skills before having sons or daughters.
On the other hand
,
this
could entail two disadvantages, namely the over-concentration
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work and genetic disorders. Because the age from 35 to 40 is said to be the best time to make money and develop career paths, many parents have focused more on their jobs and
hence
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less care for their
children
. In fact,
this
has resulted in numerous arguments and divorces in many families, especially in Asian countries, where work is prioritized rather than
children
. Another demerit is that having a baby late would give rise to more
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of genetic disorders, in
this
case
the
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Down syndrome. Research has shown that women after the age of 35 would be more likely to reproduce an infant with Down syndrome.
This
syndrome terribly affects
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a child's life and all people
suffer
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from it cannot live past sixteen years old. In conclusion, better financial status and background of upbringing are the reasons for
this
and because nowadays people are more caring about their
offsprings
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the disadvantages much pale in comparison to the advantages.
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