Some people say that government should not put money on building theatres and sports stadiums.others argue that they should spend more in medical care and education.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Expert throughout the developing and developed world are debating that fund should be used for medical field or for the improvement of the study system rather than building cinemas or playgrounds. In my opinion, development in hospitals and universities would be the right use of money.

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essay will discuss both views in the subsequent paragraphs before coming to a logical conclusion. On the one hand, it is undeniable that stadium for the games and movie theatre can provide myriad benefits to the society.

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sedentary activities of employees making them obese

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but stadiums could encourage humans to play and walk which will help them to lose weight as well as stay healthy.

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local people will tend to incline towards spending quality time with their friends and family members

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it will strengthen bonds between them.

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tyranny of 9 to 5 job is so lousy these days. People had have been working around the clock and spend less time with family due to work related stress. Cinemas can reduce their stress level and anxiety by entertainment,

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a good social activity too.

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, building of colleges and hospitals is even not a bad idea. There is no iota of doubt students are a great asset of the entire world. Better education system can provide them facilities

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due to which more and more children will opt for higher studies.

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means that the government can collect the handsome amount of revenue from academic fees's tax and that fund can be used for other development.

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construction of new hospitals will consume millions of dollars

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its benefits will be

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longer. People will be able to fight with life threatening diseases

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as COVID-19

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Aids

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and cancer are few to mention. To conclude

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from aforementioned arguments

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admittedly both scenarios have their own advantages. Government should spend money according to the people's needs.

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