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Some people think that art is an essential subject at school while others think it is a waste of time. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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In my opinion, definitely,
art
 is an important subject to be practised in school and through life.
This
 creative subject enhances the creative thinking in the tender age of the learners.
However
, it is considered as not using time efficiently by many.
Firstly
, arts are a form of recreation and refreshes the mind of the student. As well as, it is
also
 a skill to represent the culture of a place.
Secondly
, it should be noted that, through
art
 several historical incidents are recorded too, and without a doubt has been a source of forwarding knowledge. Undoubtedly
art
 is important along with the other subjects.
On the other hand
,
art
 is considered unimportant by a group of people. Especially, developing skills
for example
 in music, dance, drawing, martial arts and many other are considered as unsatisfactory because, they do not provide a stable source of income and guaranteed future with strong financial growth.
Hence
, for
this
 reason some people think that
art
 is an essential subject at school while others think it is a waste of time.
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