Human activity has damaged the environment all around the world. Some people think that humans cannot stop damaging the planet whereas other believe that we can alter our behavior and prevent future damage. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

From the perspective of some people, it is believed that all of environmental calamities damaged the planet can be arisen by human affairs. Yet, others think that by adjusting people’s
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
, we can protect the
environment
from disasters which may take place in the future. In my opinion, for saving the
environment
, people should alter their conduct. On the one hand, some problems connected with the
environment
are uncontrollable.
For instance
,
growing number
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a growing number
of people- overpopulation has
great impact
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a great impact
to
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of
the environmental disasters. Because it is clear that breeding is not banned, and
thus
, now one family may possess more than 3children. After that, there will be
necessity
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necessary
for catering them with shelters. Certainly, nowadays in order to provide
increased population
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the increased population
with land, large scale of forest trees is being cut and converting into towns and
farm lands
a rural area where farming is practiced
farmlands
, leading to
loses
something that is lost
loss
losses
of forests.
As a result
of
this
there will be
decreasement
in rainfall and damage
for
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to
the planet.
On the other hand
, if there is an adjustment of the people’s
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
, we can protect the
environment
from calamities and I agree. For obtaining
this
result,
first
of all, children should be taught to go green and be economically-friendly from their early age by teachers and parents. Not only
this
, but
also
to tackle with
this
issue, the government
have
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has
to legislate new rules. To take an example, since at the current
time everywhere
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time, everywhere
is covered with the pandemic, there is a rule for sitting at home during quarantine days.
This
kind of rules can help people to contribute together and pay attention to the circumstances of the
environment
more deeply. To sum up, as some environmental disasters do not depend on people and are uncontrollable, people may not stop them.
However
, I speculate that they have to try as much as possible for prevention.
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