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Nowadays, more and more people want to live by themselves, what are the reasons? Is it a positive or negative trend?

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The discourse regarding the trend of people living alone by themselves is a challenging debate. Some people are over the opinion that living alone offers some advantages, especially for young peoples.
However
, I agree with those who say that the significant disadvantage of living alone is inadequate of family support accompanied by
this
 lifestyle choice. In
this
 essay, I will explore some of the courses of the phenomenon, as well as give the reasons for my view. As for those who support the view of people living by themselves, there are many reasons. The most obvious one is the higher living cost involved in family
life
.
For example
, a high-paid job with a substantial amount of saving is required for people to afford to buy a decent family house, as well as the cost of a wedding ceremony,
children’s
Suggestion
children
 living, and education, which all seems significant burdens for young people, especially those living in big cities,
such
 as London, things are getting quite expensive.
Furthermore
, nowadays, women becoming more and
more independently
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more independent
, socially and financially. Not only can they go out to work like men, but can they
also
 earn enough money to cover their living expenses, unlike
last
 century, women could do house chores and look after children at home. The independence of women, in itself, is a considerable achievement of
gender equality campaign
Suggestion
the gender equality campaign
;
however
,
paradoxically it
Accept comma addition
paradoxically, it
 has changed the family dynamics, which may
also
 partially contribute to the new trend of living alone.
Finally
, the characteristics of the modern
life
 may even appear to have an impact on family
life
,
such
 as long working and commuting hours, resulting in little time and energy spent with his/her family. Admittedly, it is true that living alone leads to more freedom.
Nevertheless
, I firmly believe that family
life
,
firstly
, offers a high level of emotional support and family-bonding, which all family members receive,
for instance
, in situations of personal crisis,
such
 as grief, divorce.
Secondly
, family
life
 can teach the younger generation with qualities of love, passion,
resilient
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resilience
resiliency
 and other good characters, through family members, mainly their parents as role models.
Finally
, it is understandable that personal security may be increased, offering protection against
such
 problems as accidents or even robbery. Overall, the main reasons for people staying in single include to avoid the high living cost involved in family
life
, and the minor contributing factors would be that women become
independently
Suggestion
independent
independents
, and people have little spare time for family responsibilities. It appears to me that living with families is outweigh of that living alone, with
added benefits
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the added benefits
 of feeling happier and being supported.
Submitted by Chin Wen on

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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