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Some people say that only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

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Currently, many
 people are learning foreign languages in order to reach their aim. But what aim is it? It may be travelling, studying and others. My personal view is all reasons are reasonable.
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, many people's goals depend on
travelling foreign
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travelling in foreign
 countries and I believe that it is not difficult to travel, work or study abroad. So many people learn languages to reach
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a better prospect
 or amazing result.
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: in quarantine period of time the
number
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 of people who have been brought a broad look infinite. We can conclude that the
number
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 of
language
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 learners who is
want
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wanting
 to go foreign country is not few.
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, learn languages may not be
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related
 to go abroad. Many people have to learn foreign
language
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 by the way achieve better career in their job or in order to enter high educational institutions. In our
country most
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country, most
 of institutes and universities require
English so
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English, so
 very large
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 of people who want to study there are learning English but
few
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little
 ones may want to study abroad. If I speak other instances everywhere need translators actually where developed tourism. Currently a big
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 of businessmen are cooperating foreigners.They need to know their
language
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 or interpreters.
it
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It
 is clear that learning languages is useful anyway. To conclude, people who
knows
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know
language
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 may have
better career
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a better career
 in his or her life and there are other advantages know
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language
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language, such
such
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 as being aware that the culture and wonderful habits of that country. In short, I foreign languages help us to achieve amazing information and to reach better prospects in future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • multilingual
  • linguistic proficiency
  • globalized world
  • cross-cultural communication
  • immersive experience
  • adaptability
  • cultural exchange
  • interpersonal skills
  • employment prospects
  • empathy
  • intellectual development
  • overcome language barriers
  • global market
  • resourceful
  • life-changing
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