Some people believe that teaching music in schools is a vital part of growing up and the human experience, whilst others believe that teaching music in schools is a waste of time and resources. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In my opinion,
having a
Suggestion
plays a music class
playing a music class
are a music class playing
will a music class play
is a music class playing
has a music class played
having a music class plays
music
class plays very important role in
student's life
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a student's life
student's lives
the student's life
, while growing up and learning new things practising
music
gives them
concentarion
the strength of a solution; number of molecules of a substance in a given volume
concentration
,
some times
on certain occasions or in certain cases but not always
sometimes
it leads to a career path too.
Music
breaks the connection of
individual
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the individual
individuals
to the material so that they are able to
concentarate
make denser, stronger, or purer
concentrate
. Some people may think it to just a time
waste
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waster
wasting
thing and resources, it could be if
individual
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the individual
an individual
don't have
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doesn't have
a
slite
a deliberate discourteous act (usually as an expression of anger or disapproval)
slight
site
slot
interest
into
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in
music
. It
actully
in actual fact
actually
depends on the personal interest.
Music
gives
piece
the state prevailing during the absence of war
peace
to the mind and heart and lead to
conentrate
make denser, stronger, or purer
concentrate
more.
in
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In
conclusion,
teching
the profession of a teacher
teaching
music
in school is very
usefulthing but
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useful thing, but
useful thing but
also
it depends on the personal interest too.
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