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Immigration has a major impact on society. What are the main reasons of immigration? To what consequences can it lead?

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In my opinion, the main reason of the immigration is related to the economic reasons. Some countries, especially countries of the south of the world are governed in critical
situation
. The people are very poor, without
high
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higher
 level studies, with a critical economic
situation
, with a dark future in order to the economic perspective.
On the other hand
, usually the governments in these countries are corrupted, the people of the government are very rich and It’s usual that the
country
 is
in
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at
 war. These reasons are enough for the people need to go out of their countries.
This
 is a very hard decision because usually they
don’t
 have enough money to travel to other countries so they need to travel through the mafia. They need to pay a
lot
 of money to the mafia, probably with money credits and even after of these payments they travel in a horrible
situations
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situation
. When they come to the
country
, they are considered like illegal people, they can’t look for a legal job, they
don’t
 have public
healthcare
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health care
,
etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
… The consequences of
this
 are
catastrophics
extremely harmful; bringing physical or financial ruin
catastrophic
catastrophes
 in the original county and the final
country
 because the original
country
 loses a
lot
 of people a
lot
 of potential employees, in the original
country
 the families are abandoned for the father or mother with the intention of improve their situations in others countries. In the final
country
, the
situation
 is not better because the
country
 receives a
lot
 of sick people,
illegals
, people with a very hard future. Usually they
don’t
 speak the local language, they
don’t
 have a house, they
don’t
 have a job and the
country
 has to spend a
lot
 of resources to improve their lives. It’s very common that in the most of these situations, the people are repatriated to their countries and their plans are frustrated and the new
situation
 is even worse than at the beginning.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic migration
  • Asylum seeker
  • Diaspora
  • Expatriate
  • Refugee status
  • Work permit/visa
  • Demographic shift
  • Naturalization
  • Xenophobia
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Multiculturalism
  • Social cohesion
  • Immigration policies
  • Border control
  • Undocumented immigrants
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