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More and more businesses as well as individuals are choosing to communicate either professionally or socially using technology rather than being face to face. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of using technology for communicating

#businesses #individuals #technology #face
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There has been a tremendous increase in the number of people and big employment companies relying on the use of technology to convey and share information. They prefer online chatting, email communications and video calls over person to person interactions. There are many associated benefits as well as shortcomings over the excessive usage of the same, which will be my topic of discussion in the following paragraphs. The advancement made in the field of telecommunication, led to the influx of many online platforms that allow for
cheap
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the cheapest
cheapest
 and fastest ways of communication. It is now possible to speak with someone, looking
on
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at
in
 their face who resides miles away from your geographic location, on your computer or mobile screen through web applications like
skype
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Skype
,
facebook
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Facebook
,
facetimer
 and zoom. It
also
 provides the opportunity for more than two people
to engage
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engage
 in a conversation that make it ideal for online
business
 conferences turning them more interactive and engaging.
This
 is beneficial to
business
 enterprises as it helps in expanding
business
 in different parts of the
world
, by cutting down money and time for expensive flights and hotel bookings. To
site
make reference to
cite
 an example, video chatting and virtual conferences were profusely used to continue businesses in many
world
 cities, during the curfew imposed to combat the spread of COVID 19 virus in the year 2020.
However
, on the flip side virtual communications often restricts the warmth and the companionship associated with the real
world
 physical interaction.
For instance
,
emojis
an iconic mental representation
images
 that are profusely used in the online chatting communities could never convey emotions and intentions like the gestures and expressions that are integral part of verbal communications.
Furthermore
, there are matters pertaining privacy and security which are a growing concern on the social media. Most of the online chatting and email communications are poorly secured and could be subjected to hacking, if proper antivirus softwares are not installed in the computer system. The growing cases of data breaching and online thefts are prime examples supporting the aforementioned statement.
This
 holds true for
business
 establishments as well and are more prone to security threats,
consequently
 impacting their businesses.
Therefore it
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Therefore, it
 could be inferred that using virtual platforms for interaction may have its own benefits, but can never be a replacement for social interaction in the physical
world
.
Moreover one
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Moreover, one
 needs to be extra cautious about sharing and accessing information, to protect oneself from data breaching.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Efficiency
  • Convenience
  • Instant messaging
  • Video calls
  • Cost-effectiveness
  • Economical
  • Accessibility
  • Physical barriers
  • Nuanced understanding
  • Impersonal
  • Misunderstandings
  • Reliance
  • Technical failures
  • Vulnerable
  • Security breaches
  • Hacking
  • Data theft
  • Sensitive information
  • Digital communication
  • Face-to-face interactions
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