IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7

Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic? What are the benefits and disadvantages of this?

#tourists #places #conditions #sahara #desert #antarctic
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Nowadays, remote places like Sahara dessert or Antarctica with harsh survival conditions are being visited most often by explorers. It has become a fantasy of tourists to explore the unknown.
This
 essay will discuss the pros and cons of tourism at these places. If we enlighten the positive side of the travel, huge part of a country’s economy is being shared by the tourism industry.
Moreover
, a study shows that remote place which attracts lots of visitors are more likely to be developed than a city.
Touristry
 provides a number of employment opportunities and a chance for small businesses to prosper and it will help the economy to grow exponentially.
Furthermore
, these places
also
 increase the curiosity of scientists and geographers around the world to discover the secrets hidden in them. As every coin has a
second
 side, the dark side of exploring these isolated places is to risk it by getting exploited by all kinds of tourists. Usually the locals residing in these places are reserved and had protected their traditions from ages. When these places are exposed for exploration, it might put their culture on the brink of extinction. According to a survey from national archaeologists of America, it shows that the aboriginal people, who belongs to these places, do not like the intrusion of outsiders, because they think that they will destroy their sacred home. To sum up, tourism has its both advantages and disadvantages, but it is very important for explorers understand that wrecking someone’s community for a discovery is very unethical. To resolve
this
 issue, the government should make strict policies towards adventure and research study at these places.
Submitted by zoyapervez21 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: