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these days, more and more people are going to other countries for significant period of time, either to find a job or study. there are clearly many benefits to doing this, but people who live abroad can also face some difficulties. do advantages outweight its disadvantages?

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Nowadays, people tend to migrate from their native countries to another to look for a better life, either to find employment or to study. While living abroad is beneficial in some aspects, the drawbacks are more significant.
To begin
 with, there are some considerable pros of living overseas.
First
, people will have the opportunity to have a solid foundation in soft skills. Almost companies value international experiences, even if people move away for entertainment. When a person migrates to another country, there have been always an improvement in their communication, social, and networking skills.
Secondly
, living abroad is not a bad decision if an adult wants to find a job with a high salary and expanded career opportunities.
For example
, the average salary of a normal factory worker in Vietnam is 6 million per month, while in japan that figure is tenfold. Despite the positives mentioned above, living in a foreign country is a negative development for various reasons.
First
 of all, one reason worth mentioning is the cultural shock.
Although
Suggestion
Despite
 being exposed to a whole new culture is an undeniable advantage, it can be a disadvantage for
first
-time living overseas. People often have to take a while to adapt to new things,
also
 the new living conditions are different from what they've been accustomed to before.
Secondly
, homesickness is something that any living has abroad felt. Work and study in a remote country where thousands of kilometres away from home, nostalgia for family, friends, relatives is inevitable. Especially in times of feeling stuck and difficult, the feeling of homesickness makes people weak and want to let go. To sum up,
although
 living abroad is advantageous for some reasons
such
 as soft skills improveme
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refers to the speaker or writer
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t, i firmly believe that the shortcomings, including homesickness, are more serious to consider
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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