There are many reasons that can motivate a person to stay working for the same company. Some believe that money is the main reason. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that, the company is providing many benefits for their employees to encourage them to continue their job in the same organization. While a few people believed that, the worker staying in the same industries for the salary increment.

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important for every working man and women.

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, there are multiple other reasons

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culture, familiar with peers, etc.

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of all, many employees are like to doing their

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in the same industries. The

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have been working

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they are having

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a familiar relationship

with their staff and they have created good bonding and image with their seniors.

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, my friend Neha, working as

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a software engineer

in the Automation technology company, since 5 years. They feel very comfortable with their colleagues and they have good relation with their senior employees. When, I asked her

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change their job.

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, she replayed me, she is very happy with that current

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place. So, she do not ready to change their job.

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is thought

that, the increment is the core

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behind to staying with the same factory. No doubt, the money is

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very important

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for everyone, who is doing

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work

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the work

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, some people

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for only money. If they

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peace and better

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environment, than they do not want to switch their

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place.

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by the Reliance info tech, in 2018, 75% workers, who are working with that, since more than 4 years. They are happy with the company’s

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environment and they have good bonding with their seniors and junior colleagues. So, they are not thinking about to change their industries. In conclusion, Money is rare

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for working with the single organization. But,

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culture and comfortable zone is

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the most important factor

for stay working for the same company.

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There are many reasons that can motivate a person to stay working for the same company. Some believe that money is the main reason. Do you agree or disagree?

Your opinion

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