The gap between the rich and the poor is growing. What problem does this create? What can be done to tackle them?

In
this
contemporary era, it is
irrefutable fact
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an irrefutable fact
that impoverished people are becoming
more poor
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poorer
and wealthy individuals are getting richer. It has caused
myriad
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a myriad
of problems. To tackle these problems I believe that governments should take numerous steps as well as measures to improve living standards of backward people. Discussing the problems,
first
and
formost
ranking above all others
foremost
problem
is unemployment. Unemployment has become
crucial question
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a crucial question
for developing nations to solve. Because, to get high-paying job, it is mandatory to have
high
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higher
education
. But, due to expensive
education
, people who are living under backward
class
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Class
are
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is
unable to complete their higher
education
which will lead to collapse chance of getting job for underprivileged natives.
Moreover
,
malnourishment
is another
problem
which is faced by poor people. Because, they do not have sufficient amount of money to buy food for them
.
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.
Although
all
this
problem
are
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is
critical
,
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,
it is important to find solutions.
Firstly
, ministry should provide free book as well as
reduce fees structure
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a reduced fee structure
reduce fee structure
reduced fee structure
reduced fees structure
which will help them to finish their higher
education
.
Besides
this
, authority should create not only job
opportunities but
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opportunities, but
also
pension scheme which will assist them to decline their poverty level. I would like to conclude by saying that the gap between poor and rich natives has created all
this
problem
such
as unemployment and starvation
;
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;
however
,
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,
if
government
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the government
starts reducing fees structure it is possible to solve these problems.
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