The gap between the rich and the poor is growing. What problem does this create? What can be done to tackle them?

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contemporary era, it is

irrefutable fact

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an irrefutable fact

that impoverished people are becoming

more poor

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poorer

and wealthy individuals are getting richer. It has caused

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a myriad

of problems. To tackle these problems I believe that governments should take numerous steps as well as measures to improve living standards of backward people. Discussing the problems,

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and

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ranking above all others

foremost

problem

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is unemployment. Unemployment has become

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a crucial question

for developing nations to solve. Because, to get high-paying job, it is mandatory to have

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higher

education

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. But, due to expensive

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, people who are living under backward

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unable to complete their higher

education

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which will lead to collapse chance of getting job for underprivileged natives.

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malnourishment

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is another

problem

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which is faced by poor people. Because, they do not have sufficient amount of money to buy food for them

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all

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problem

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critical

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it is important to find solutions.

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, ministry should provide free book as well as

reduce fees structure

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a reduced fee structure

reduce fee structure

reduced fee structure

reduced fees structure

which will help them to finish their higher

education

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, authority should create not only job

opportunities but

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opportunities, but

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pension scheme which will assist them to decline their poverty level. I would like to conclude by saying that the gap between poor and rich natives has created all

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problem

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as unemployment and starvation

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;

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government

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the government

starts reducing fees structure it is possible to solve these problems.

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