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Some governments spend a lot of public money training individuals to be successful in international sporting events. Some people believe that this money should be spent on things that will benefit the general public instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Some people think that money spent by the
government
 on training athletes for the global competition should be spent on the public
instead
 as it is their own tax money. While I believe that governments should invest more in sports and its participants than making more flyovers or gardens.
This
 essay would discuss the benefits of
government
 supporting a
sportsperson
 for preparing them for International events. We live in the times where having
global ranking
Suggestion
a global ranking
 in athletics has become integral. More and more countries have started coming together and competing.
Such
 events hold a national reputation
on
Suggestion
at
 stake to prove which country has a better population in athletics.
Hence
 to prove in
this
 scenario, the local authorities support individuals for training them for
such
 events.
Such
 sports events
also
 support in breaking the old notion followed in out countries for instances, In India earlier female participation in any events was bare minimal,
however in
Accept comma addition
however, in
past 5 years
Suggestion
the past 5 years
 we have won in all the categories and now we have Badminton world champion, Fastest Female runner and Boxing world champion. And now many girls look up to them and dream to be one of them.
Thus
, sometimes
its
it is
it's
 more important for the
government
 to focus
on training one
Suggestion
training on one
 person. To conclude, for the
government
 to have a ranking in the top best countries of athletes is important for
countries'
Suggestion
country's
 reputation, and
secondly
,
this
 investment most times breaks long old barriers of thought to build a better tomorrow.
Therefore
, in my opinion, the
government
 should spend tax money on training individuals for them to succeed in International sporting events.
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