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Some people think that teachers should be responsible for teaching students to judge what is right and what is wrong so that they can behave well. Others think that teachers should only teach academic subjects to students. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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These days, there has been a debate whether the teachers should teach students to what is correct and incorrect for them. While some people argue that it is the responsibility of the tutors to educate children about do's and Don'ts, others claim it is the sole duty of parents. I believe that it should be the collective efforts of both educators and parents.
Firstly
, I believe that the teachers are not just responsible for an academic teaching, but
also
 it is their duty to show the right path to success to students. They can assist children to identify how they can behave in a society. Teachers must educate them what is wrong and right so that the learners do not get indulged in bad activities and can protect themselves from underachievers.
Besides
, It is observed that nowadays parents don't have sufficient time for their offspring, in
such
 a situation, a tutor's role becomes even more important.
On the other hand
, some argue that the instructors should restrict themselves only to an educational teaching. They believe that they have only the authority to educate their children about positive and negative things.
Also
, some parents that teachers might teach bad things to their kids.
For example
, there are many teachers around the world who can radicalize their students on political or social issues. Taking everything into consideration, I would say that despite of some rotten apples in teaching profession, tutors must tell their students about what is wrong and what is right for them.
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