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Too much money is spent on repairing old buildings, instead of repairing old buildings, that money should be spent on knocking down old buildings and building new ones. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that the old
government
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 offices should be demolished and construct new ones, given that the expenditure to repair the old ones is very high.
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 essay agrees with that statement because newly constructed buildings have a long
life
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, and does not require frequent repairs. A good reason to build new offices is that they do not need frequent repairs, unlike the old ones.
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, as new buildings are constructed with the latest technology, they are less prone to damage, which ultimately results in a low maintenance cost.
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, a recent
government
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 survey in India found that the repair cost of the old
government
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 quarters cost them 10 million, whereas newly built quarters needed just 1 million dollars. Another point to consider is that new buildings have a long
life
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.
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 to say that new buildings can be utilised for
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a number
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 of years compared to the old ones as these are constructed recently, and
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 eventually saves a huge amount of money to the
government
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.
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, a research study carried out by the postgraduate students of Chicago State University found that the
life
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 of buildings constructed in the 21st century
will have
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had
 10 years more
life
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 than those built in the 20th century. In conclusion, new buildings should be constructed
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 of repairing the old ones because new ones can
last
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 long and require repairs very rarely.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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