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The two pie graphs illustrate the volume of the jungle in 5 distinct zones around the world and the timber’s proportion of timber in a single sector. It is clear that the percentages of forest in Africa and North America were relatively higher than the other three regions, while Asia was the smallest the component in the
first
 chart.
In addition
, North America still made up the majority in the amount of timber,
however
, Africa shared the lowest figure. Africa took the lion’s share of the jungle’s proportion with 27% and
this
 was nearly double the figures of Asia’s forest which was just at 14 %. The
second
 component was for North America at approximately 25%, whereas, the rest two zones-South Africa and Europe were nearly equal, at 18% and 14% respectively. Despite of ranking the highest place between other zones, but the percentage of timber in Africa has been just under 10% and was less triple times that of North America
(
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at 30%). The volume of log in South America and Europe was relatively high about 20% for both segments,
by contrast
, Asia was just under 19% and took the fourth place before Asia’s rank.
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