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Everybody should be allowed admission to university or college programs regardless of their level of academic ability. To what expand do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#everybody #admission #university #college #programs #level #ability
Every single
person
 has an education
right that’s
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right, that’s
 why should be permitted who want to be an undergraduate student.
Also
, when
this
happen
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happens
, their academic ability’s level should be unconcerned. In my opinion, I agree that everybody can
goes
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go
 to
university
 because human rights include
education right
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education rights
. Not going to
university
 has some bad effects like ignorance. Ignorance is the most significant problem in
this
 century. When people do not go there because of their shortage ability, they have not chance to enhance themselves about new subjects
such
 as math, science or biology. If people do not improve themselves, they cannot develop their country.
Also
, when
this
happen people
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happen, people
 who live in
this
 underdeveloped country when struggle
to
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for
with
 anything like health problems. When people suffer from stomach disease, they want to go to
doctor
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the doctor
a doctor
. If in
this
 country has not proper doctor about
this
 illness,
patient
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the patient
 cannot take an appropriate treatment. It might not be
happened
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happening
 if every
person
 who want to go to
university
 can go to
university
. When people go to
university
, they met different kind of people who have different thoughts. Tolerance is one of the most essential ability that the
university
 gives them. When they learn how to be
respect
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respected
 other’s ideas, they can survive in the life easily and
also
 different ideas can be helpful for
expand
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expanding
 their mind. Less tolerance can be causing so many violent activities like fights or murders. We should take action to eliminate these horrible incidents. Educating people is one of the most significant solution for
this
. Every single
person
 should be able to go to
university
 without considering their academic ability’s level. Considering all
these
denotes a person or thing
this
, it is unwise to evaluate people according to their academic level. Every
person
 has an education
right so
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right, so
 as to get rid of ignorance and learn how to tolerate other people.
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