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The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashion. The new fashion will be to have several other career or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life. Discuss both views and give your opinion with relevant examples.

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The thought of pursuing a single career is not in the trend now. Now and
then
, people would come up with other opportunities or methods of getting money and higher studies will never die throughout the life. In my view, I agree with the statement. So, basically these depend on the person's capability.
Firstly
, there is no offence if someone does not have the skill to cope up with multiple task as, it's possible that he could not have that much ability. And
also
, he should not even try if it is not happening.
For instance
, statistically 55 % of people become jealous and get annoyed as, they cannot accomplish multiple task and earn money like others. Nowadays, people want to educate themselves to
next level which
Suggestion
the next level, which
the next level which
 can make them successful in terms of life as well as in the trend. They study different fields so that they become multi-Tasker and by doing that they lead to new fashion. In fact, there are some who are born talented and they easily make money because, of their talent.
For example
, mothers are
nevertheless
 great multi-Workers and take care of each and every person in the family. In conclusion, every person should improve their skills in
such
 a way that they can make an income on it. Whether it is in the new fashion or not if you are confident enough, you can make a career out of it.
Also
, you should try to increase the quantity of fields for taking part in the training so that it works well ahead. So,
this
 was my view on
this
 particular topic.
Submitted by Krina Patel on

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