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Write about the following topic: In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In the UK or any other country around they world some people tend to give their parents when they are old to a place, where they live their rest of life with other old people like them. The case here is the money, and who should pay for the
responsibility
, the government or the family?
Thus
, in
this
 essay
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 will discuss who should pay for
this
 care, the government or the family? To start with,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 think that the family should pay for that
responsibility
 because they are their patients and they should live with them until they die.
However
, if the children needed to get away from them and leave them living alone with strange
peole
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
 their rest of life, they should definitely pay for their care as
this
 is the
least
immediately past
last
 thing they can do for them.
Furthermore
, the children who brought their parents to a place like that sometimes they need some help with caring or cleaning, so all of
that is
bacilaclly
 the duties of their children not the
elerly
advanced in years; ('aged' is pronounced as two syllables)
elderly
canter
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
. fffg gghh gfgh hghhg It is better to let the family paying for that, because if it was the government
then
 usually some people will bring their families to the elderly
responsibility
 centre as it's free of charge for gating that its their responsibilities to care and help their parents. To sum it all up, the family should pay for the
responsibility
 as they should feel the geil their doing to their patients and the whole world.
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