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Men and women are different in terms of their characteristics and abilities. For this reason, some jobs are better done by men and others by women. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays a certain number of people dedicate their
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lives
 totally to their
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 and career. Recently, more and more people have been spending a lot of
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 in the offices doing overtime.
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 essay will examine the advantages and disadvantages of
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 attitude tendency and provide a logical conclusion.
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, when people spend too much
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, they neglect other spheres of
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. Almost every person has a family and relatives, which assist, believe, and motivate us.
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, the majority of men and women forget about it. Society prefers to
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 hard, spend
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 with computers or colleagues, and make a career.
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, workaholics do not have
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 for close people.
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, the divorce rate increases every year, children see their parents only on weekends and elderly parents wait for a phone call.
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, workaholics do not have
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 for close people and social
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.
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, long working hours influence human health.
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, people who
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 overtime do not have
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 to exercise, and they often eat fast food, because cooking needs
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, they have a problem with obesity. Another problem is the influence on eyesight. More and more young people are wearing glasses as they spend too much
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 looking at the computer screen or other devices.
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, diligence is a real chance for young people to demonstrate their motivation and attitude to the employer. It is especially important after graduating/graduated from university without real working experience.
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, sometimes people have a deadline,
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, finishing a project, which will take them long hours to meet the deadline and complete the task,
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, it does not have to be permanent and long term. In conclusion, overtime has a negative effect on people’s social
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 and health, maintaining
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 balance is extremely important for men and women. Sometimes people can have long working hours but no more one or two times a month.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • innate
  • biological differences
  • characteristics
  • gender roles
  • stereotypes
  • equal opportunities
  • gender biases
  • fair representation
  • skills
  • qualifications
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