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Developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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In the modern era as an economy is a developing it is necessary to require a large amount of
money
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. It is often argued that
nation
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 who already have strongest health should different sorts of offer
instead
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 of monetary fund. I certainly disagree with
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 notion because
money
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 is the essential key brought development for any region.
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 with, a well set
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 should give funds to backward ones. There are several reasons for
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.
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 and foremost, if the economy gets the aid in the form of
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 they can spend in a sector where actually required. Which lead to boom a particular aspects of countries.
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, In 2003 USA built major School in Bhutan.
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, Bhutan actually a lot requirement in medical as their health sector as very downward. So countries like Bhutan need of financial help
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 of other aid.
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, a country gets
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 from another
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 can
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 pay their debt and release burden of interest. As a consequence, their economy grows in an efficient manner.
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, in 2016 India got the fever from the Japan amount of 1000
crore
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. Which Indian used to pay their debt,
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, a country grows rapidly and reported
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a 8 % increase
 in GDP in
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next year
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the next year
. To conclude, after musing both sides of the argument I believe that financial aid is the best way to encourage other
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. As other kind of help is not efficient and there are a several reasons to demonstrate that
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 is not the case.
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