"Prevention is better than cure" Researching and treating disease is to costly so it would be better to invest in preventative measures.

Nowadays there are more different types of illnesses in the world. And either of them have not
cure
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cured
. Preventive is
more effective way
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a more effective way
the more effective way
than
cure
.
Plethora
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A plethora
of people
want
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wants
be
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to be
absolutely healthy. Either of them go in for sports to be healthy. So far there are people who prefer preventing than spending more money
for
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to
cure
. But they
also
may go to
cure
if they can not
preventive
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prevent
their diseases. Because there are many illnesses that people can not
preventive
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prevent
. So the I am strongly convinced that both of them are evenly important for the society. At
first
, many illnesses
are increased
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are increasing
day by day. And one of them is diabetic disease.
Nowadays many
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Nowadays, many
older people have diabetes. Now it
also
defines on children. To prevent it usually people follow right eating and eat less delicious foods. People who have diabetes should do more
sports
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sports, although
although
for 1 time a day. It is
more useful way
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a more useful way
than
cure
.
This
prevention help to a lot of people who have diabetes in the world.
Personaly i
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Personally, I
Personaly I
Personally I
Personally i
think people can not preventive diseases every time. I mean that they will be required to
cure
. As I said at
first
there are many illnesses that people can not preventive
therefore
they will
cure
.
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.
Diseases can be cancer or
covid
19 which increases now. The
cure
of
this
disease has not found yet.
Therefore
the needful thing to
cure
this
disease is only
go
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going
to
cure
on time. If it has not any attentions or noticing for it, it appears to death. In
conclusion I
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conclusion, I
want to say that In my
view there
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view, there
are many different
didiseases
an impairment of health or a condition of abnormal functioning
diseases
. And either of
them we
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them, we
can
preventive
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prevent
but either of
them we
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them, we
can not
can not
cannot
because we might not notice them so
therefore
we require to
cure
.
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