With the increased global demand in oil and gas, undiscovered areas of the world should be opened up to access more resources.

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every

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education imparted in a series of lessons or meetings

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cause

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as agree and disagree. There are more resources in the world that people get so far. Nowadays there are useful resources that people need like gas and

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. They are playing important role in the modern life. But to get them much more I suppose we should not open up to access more resources. It is

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way deeply diddles the

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totally disagree with it. Now everything that invented by people work by

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, every technologies need

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are more things that must prepare with

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Oil

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a needful thing

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gas.

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using

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there a lot of waste leave in the rivers and lakes.

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remains of them absolutely pollute the

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situation more animals will perish. Afterwards animals can shrink. In my point of view after getting resources the place which stay that resources will be empty so it follow to earthquakes. Earthquakes are dangerous for the society. We can not safe our life if it will situate.

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in our country has enough gas and

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nowadays. It is enough for a long time.

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and gas companies

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that people need to the resources and they

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save from ruin, destruction, or harm

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save from ruin, destruction, or harm

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resources for the future. I think by

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way we can

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in our country.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

265 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

global demand
finite resources
energy consumption
exploiting
untouched ecosystems
carbon emissions
climate change
renewable energy
sustainable energy solutions
geopolitical consequences
territorial disputes
dependency

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With the increased global demand in oil and gas, undiscovered areas of the world should be opened up to access more resources.

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Some people believe that social media sites, such as Facebook or Twitter, have a negative impact on young people and their ability to form personal relationships. Others believe that these sites bring people together in a beneficial way. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.

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Write an essay that summarizes and evaluates the key points of both texts. Use your own words to the extent

Some people say that the only way to get success is to go to the University. Others say that it depends on other factors. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that it is beneficial for children to play online games, while others think that it can be harmful for children. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?