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Children find it difficult to concentrate on or pay attention to their study in school. Why? How can we solve this problem?

#children #attention #study #school
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Back to the days we are still in
school
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, I believe that everyone has
experience
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experienced
 that it is difficult to concentrate on
class
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, much or less, which can come from the many of factors. We are going to discuss
this
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 issue, why
sometime
on certain occasions or in certain cases but not always
sometimes
 it is extremely hard to keep focus on study? And, how can we fix
this
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 problem? The answers are in the following paragraphs.
To begin
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 with, many students have to go
thoroughly
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thorough
 the entirely boring
class
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. Sometime, students find that the
class
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 is not appealing to study.
This
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 issue can come from many things
such
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 as teaching style, study environment or the subject teacher. From my own experience, some teachers are unwilling to teach, and what they do
all the
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all, the
 day is not what calling teaching but just only reading the
text book
according to or characteristic of a casebook or textbook; typical
textbook
 for their students.
Secondly
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, some subjects which
school
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has provide
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has provided
 to their students is useless and out-of-date.
For instance
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, I have to suffer all the semester learning a Thai-
culture dancing
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culture, dancing
 which I cannot perform it anywhere at all. Some students think that these ridiculous subjects
is
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are
 nothing but only a waste of time and do not want to participate in the
class
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. Conclusion, in my points of view, the main factors of
this
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 problem are most came from both the
school
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 and teachers. If the
school
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 can arrange more of the courses which can truly use in real life, and the teachers can change the teaching style slightly more interesting.
Then
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, studying will not be boring anymore.
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