Children find it difficult to concentrate on or pay attention to their study in school. Why? How can we solve this problem?

Back to the days we are still in
school
, I believe that everyone has
experience
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experienced
that it is difficult to concentrate on
class
, much or less, which can come from the many of factors. We are going to discuss
this
issue, why
sometime
on certain occasions or in certain cases but not always
sometimes
it is extremely hard to keep focus on study? And, how can we fix
this
problem? The answers are in the following paragraphs.
To begin
with, many students have to go
thoroughly
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thorough
the entirely boring
class
. Sometime, students find that the
class
is not appealing to study.
This
issue can come from many things
such
as teaching style, study environment or the subject teacher. From my own experience, some teachers are unwilling to teach, and what they do
all the
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all, the
day is not what calling teaching but just only reading the
text book
according to or characteristic of a casebook or textbook; typical
textbook
for their students.
Secondly
, some subjects which
school
has provide
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has provided
to their students is useless and out-of-date.
For instance
, I have to suffer all the semester learning a Thai-
culture dancing
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culture, dancing
which I cannot perform it anywhere at all. Some students think that these ridiculous subjects
is
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are
nothing but only a waste of time and do not want to participate in the
class
. Conclusion, in my points of view, the main factors of
this
problem are most came from both the
school
and teachers. If the
school
can arrange more of the courses which can truly use in real life, and the teachers can change the teaching style slightly more interesting.
Then
, studying will not be boring anymore.
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