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Some modern artists receive huge sums of money for the things they create, while others struggle to survive. Governments should take steps to resolve this unfair situation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the society nowadays, funding creative artists is becoming a serious problem. Some people think that
artist
Suggestion
artists
an artist
the artist
 should be given
backings but
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backings, but
 others think it is not enough. But personally
,
Accept space
,
 I believe
money
Suggestion
the money
 for art projects should come from both governments and other sources. There are many kinds of
artist
. And some of them will require help from the state. Those artists are usually
sculptor
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sculpted
.
Accept space
.
 Their products
such
 as statues, sculptures that represent culture, heritage and history are very precious and sometimes invaluable. Their products will help the children to learn
history which
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history, which
 will strengthen our country. But the government’s source is sometimes not enough for
artist
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an artist
. Some of them may need to fly abroad to have the inspiration.
Government
Suggestion
The government
 cannot just care about
artist
 and throw away everything else. They have some more important things.
For example
, in
this
 outbreak the virus needs more care from
government
Suggestion
the government
. So
artist
Suggestion
the artist
 should work on their own, too, not just
seat
be seated
sit
 and wait for the
money
. They can sell their pictures and make
money
of
from a particular thing or place or position
off
 them like everyone does with their products. In conclusion, I believe that only government cannot fund creative
artist
 enough so they need to find ways to make
money
 from other sources, too.
Submitted by Trung Đinh on

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