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In many places new homes are needed but the only place available for building them in the countryside .some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What’s ur opinion about this ?

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New homes are highly necessary in the several communities
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however only
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however, only
 outskirts are vacant enough to accommodate new constructions and
also
 few people believe that countryside’s needs to be protected rather than make new homes or buildings.I clearly endorse
this
 viewpoint due to the damage has done to the environment by the human interference. Fundamentally
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the human population has grown by the leaps and the bounds.
Therefore
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the needs of people are
also
 exponentially increased
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henceforth
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human race exploiting the nature and has had detrimental effects which are deteriorates the balance of ecosystems and microorganism which could thrive only in the outskirts.Many animals and plants are on the brim of extinction due to the human extensive misconduct. If people are persisting to exploit forest in the outskirts would worsen the situation,
hence
 the government and the people should put the best foot forward to mitigate
this
 menace.
For example
, developed countries like USA and UK have rigid rules for building constructions, which have predominantly protected the nature preserves. Another factor would be the human influx to outskirts could bring more business and other infrastructure facilities in that region and it can eventually be a cramped place which would affect the peaceful life of rural area.
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one of the new construction of IT park in India in the outskirt accelerated the growth of small scale business and
subsequently
 people started moving to the place,
as a result
, now it becomes a small town. Suffice to say,
although
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people need more homes since population flourished
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occupying countryside would not be a solution for
this
 due to the severe damage humans already made to the nature and we have yet to know that what is stored for the future in the unfathomable turn of time.
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