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Many people today find it difficult to balance the demand of their work and personal life. what are the causes of this situation, and but can be individuals amd employers do to reduce the problem?

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It is an important issue among all people who have found many problems and cannot have discipline in their personal lives and works. In
this
 essay discussed some causes which are considered and individuals can solve them. On of the problems that employers can face it, they do not have a plan or a time plan to make it easier for themselves.
For example
, having a plane with some tasks can be efficient to bring an order and balance in your growth. Some employees will put effort into their works to be in a higher position at task or finish all their jobs as quickly as they can, so in
this
 way they can hardly ever obtain turn to spend with their families or friends.
In addition
, some people claim that
this
 problem is provided by a complicated lifestyle or they do not have a person or a friend to help them out.
However
, employers should have a unique lifestyle with a limited space for some struggle.
Although
, it can be tough, but bring you an order and discipline between your heart and task
consequently
. To sum up, make a decision about a balances' activity, all of the generations has been a crucial aim by people. Making a plan with allocated tasks can help them to be in a right way and
also
 have a unique or at least an order soul would help them out to achieve the balance.
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