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Some people claim tobacco has brought social problems and smoking should be banned. To extend do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that some individuals believe that consumption of tobacco has created problems in society, so they aren't used cigarettes and smoking should be forbidden. In my view,
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 decision has to made by their owns,
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 that would be harmless. All people have known that cigarette smoking has many losses and using of it can bring troubles in anybody's life
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 as cancer, which is one of the dangerous ills in the world.
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, a person has struggled with
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 issue, but his relatives are in front of it as well.
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, have a disease which is happening with smoking crop entangle your family too.
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, family or friends who have got more face-to-face communications are in danger when they are smoking than that person who smokes in his own.
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, governments limited consuming of it in some places
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 as at work and public places and
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 rule is compulsory in most countries.
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, consumption of the crop depends on individuals' opinion, even though if would be banned by the government, but it does not solve
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 trend. In conclusion, consumers of cigarette have had information about drawbacks of it, but they keep smoking.
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 way has disadvantages and in my opinion, it depends on a person's decision and politicians do not have to limit
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 act.
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