Some people believe that all wild animals should be protected. Others say that few wild animals should be protected insted. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
A group of individuals suggest that the lives of all dangerous species should be preserved
while
another set believe
rather than that, a limited Change the verb form
believes
number
of dangerous animals
should be kept. In my opinion, I believe the
only the lives of dangerous Correct your spelling
that
animals
pertinent to humans should be
be conserved as these Unnecessary verb
apply
animals
pose a serious threat to human life .
On one
other hand, a certain school of Correct determiner usage
the
though
believes all dangerous Correct your spelling
thought
animals
should be protected and decision
is Add an article
the decision
a decision
due to
the fact that all animals
are needed to have a functional ecosystem. Animals
are required at every level of the food chain and the absence of one animal could lead to the disruption of energy levels and lead to the emergence of problems like famine which could occur simply as a result
of the eradication of wild locusts. An example of this
is seen in Guinea-Bissau where the minister of environment released a report about the surge in the infertility of their farmlands and attributed this
to the absence of wild natured
earthworms that burrow the Add a hyphen
wild-natured
earth
surface.
Change noun form
earth's
On the other hand
, another school of though
thinks that a limited Correct your spelling
thought
number
of wild animals
should be preserved and I agree because of the imminent dangers these animals
pose. A large number
of wild animals
are dangerous and for the purpose of feeding have been responsible for the gruesome mutilation of mankind and this
has consequently
resulted in the decision to preserve the less violent ones. Studies from the Institute of Forest and Animal Reserves in Florida showed that people were responsible for the massacre of a large number
of bears in the state and this
annihilation begun
after over 60 thousand people were murdered by these bears in the forests. Wrong verb form
began
Furthermore
, it is extremely difficult domesticating
wild Change the verb form
to domesticate
animals
. Zoo keeper
find it highly laborious Fix the agreement mistake
keepers
taming
some wild Change the verb form
to tame
animals
such
as lions and monkeys and would be even more arduous to domesticate a higher number
of dangerous species.
In conclusion, although
these wild animals
are needed to complete the food chain and energy levels for an effective ecosystem, the imminent threat to human life they pose coupled with
the extreme difficulty attached with
tending to them should not be ignored.Change preposition
to
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task response
Ensure that you address both points of view clearly and provide a balanced discussion.
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