Some people believe that all wild animals should be protected. Others say that few wild animals should be protected insted. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

A group of individuals suggest that the lives of all dangerous species should be preserved
while
another set
believe
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rather than that, a limited
number
of dangerous
animals
should be kept. In my opinion, I believe
the
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only the lives of dangerous
animals
pertinent to humans should
be
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be conserved as these
animals
pose a serious threat to human life . On
one
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other hand, a certain school of
though
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believes all dangerous
animals
should be protected and
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is
due to
the fact that all
animals
are needed to have a functional ecosystem.
Animals
are required at every level of the food chain and the absence of one animal could lead to the disruption of energy levels and lead to the emergence of problems like famine which could occur simply
as a result
of the eradication of wild locusts. An example of
this
is seen in Guinea-Bissau where the minister of environment released a report about the surge in the infertility of their farmlands and attributed
this
to the absence of
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earthworms that burrow the
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surface.
On the other hand
, another school of
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thinks that a limited
number
of wild
animals
should be preserved and I agree because of the imminent dangers these
animals
pose. A large
number
of wild
animals
are dangerous and for the purpose of feeding have been responsible for the gruesome mutilation of mankind and
this
has
consequently
resulted in the decision to preserve the less violent ones. Studies from the Institute of Forest and Animal Reserves in Florida showed that people were responsible for the massacre of a large
number
of bears in the state and
this
annihilation
begun
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after over 60 thousand people were murdered by these bears in the forests.
Furthermore
, it is extremely difficult
domesticating
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wild
animals
. Zoo
keeper
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find it highly laborious
taming
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some wild
animals
such
as lions and monkeys and would be even more arduous to domesticate a higher
number
of dangerous species. In conclusion,
although
these wild
animals
are needed to complete the food chain and energy levels for an effective ecosystem, the imminent threat to human life they pose
coupled with
the extreme difficulty attached
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tending to them should not be ignored.
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task response
Ensure that you address both points of view clearly and provide a balanced discussion.
coherence cohesion
Work on creating a more cohesive structure by using appropriate linking words and organizing your ideas more effectively.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • ecosystem
  • conservation status
  • ecological significance
  • holistic approach
  • endangered species
  • natural heritage
  • unforeseen negative impacts
  • economically non-viable
  • prioritization
  • ecosystem balance
  • conservation efforts
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