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Recently, abortion increases rapidly and becomes a controversial topic. Some people suppose that abortion should be legal while others are against it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In
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 affluent world, rapidly increasing abortion rate is a major problem around the globe. Where many people deem that miscarriage should be legal in the country while others do not favour it. In
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 essay, we will discuss both the
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a politically organized body of people under a single government
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 and I believe that abortion should be considered as a crime and there must be punishment for it in our society. Commencing with the USP reason,
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 kind of activity upholds the biggest problem of an inequality among the male and female ratio in our society. In other worlds, once it is a legal to drop the
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 before birth, based on an immoral thinking of myriad people, it will boost up the trend of keeping the baby boy
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 of a baby girl. According to
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 survey conducted around the world, 80% couple wanted a boy as their only
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 and even 50% of them were agreed to drop a baby girl if they would have known before birth.
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,
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 kind of criminal activity mush to alleviate in today's prosperous world.
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, It is an irrefutable that every citizen has a constitutional right to keep their
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 or not,
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 in
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 circumstances, when they do not prepare for a
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, no
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 can stop them for abortion.
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, to control the country's population, government can
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 opt to allow
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 termination as a solution. For an example of China, there is a law called ''
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,
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 nation'', where people are not allowed to keep more than
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 or else they will be fined for that. By agglomeration all discussion, it must be clearly seen an immoral thinking and consider as an illegal activity which must be punishable, until unless any unusual situation arise.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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