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In modern society, it is possible to go shopping, work and communicate via the Internet without face-to-face contact with one another. To what extent do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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With the rapid
development
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 of the Internet and widespread use of the computers, people can go shopping,
work
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 and communicate online in modern society. In my perspective, these
development
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 advantages outweigh disadvantages. There is no doubt that the Internet will make our lives more convenient and efficient. Primarily, people can break through the barriers of
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 and space to do anything they want,
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 as shopping online at home, completing some unexpected
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 tasks on weekends.
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, if you need to communicate with each other abruptly, the Internet will be very helpful. You may not be able to have a face-to-face contact in a very timely fashion, which may cause some serious
consequences so
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consequences, so
 that communication via a communication via video chat programme and social media is the best way to solve
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 problem. Another benefit of web-based technology is that people can save some cost of
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 and money. People can shop online, telecommuting and web chat which allow them to avoid possible travel
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 and costs.
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, there are large numbers of office workers who can reduce unnecessary trips during rush
hour which
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hour, which
 can reduce traffic congestion and make full use of
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 if they needn't travel to
work
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. And, people who need to travel a long distance to
work
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 should be delighted
too
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, shopping online is a convenient alternative to driving to the store, because it not only helps
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does
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 management well, but
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 lets people look up a range of similar items for comparison quickly. At the same
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, people can enjoy a more comfortable environment at home where they can
do
engage in
make
 things happier and have a high quality of life.
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 the Internet offers positives that are deniable, there are some shortcomings to it.
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 diminishes the opportunities to go outside, which makes the young generation lose some social skills.
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, it is harmful for eyesight to face to phones and computers in a whole day. But no matter what, web-based technology aims to provide humans with a life of high quality and a
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 style of convenience which I believe
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 a positive and great
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • online shopping
  • remote work
  • virtual meetings
  • contactless transactions
  • convenience
  • accessibility
  • efficiency
  • time-saving
  • globalization
  • cultural exchange
  • social interaction
  • fraud
  • misuse
  • dependency
  • technology
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