Nowadays, more people are choosing to socialize online rather than face to face. Is this a positive or negative development?

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In the contemporary era, most people prefer to socialize online rather than face to face. I believe that,

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a negative development

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. Some people say

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positive

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a positive development

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while

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others, argues

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brings up negative

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. I believe that,

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create

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creates

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on them.

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, being socialize may end up with

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a mind

-illness,

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as depression, anxiety and so on. Recently, there was an article regarding more than 70% younger people in US having depression because of using social media more than 12 hours/day.

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, people can not able to identify the real character of

other

any of various alternatives; some other

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unless they meet them personally. In fact,

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a few days

back, a couple who got married by

met

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meeting

up in online have gotten a divorce within 6 months of marriage.

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, people do not know about how to behave in society. If a person who tends to spend on social media rather than going outside meet

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some others

some other

in outside, they usually do not know what to talk with them. To support

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, my uncle's son who tends

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to be spent

their whole day in phone. One day, his father's mother came to home, he did not know what to talk with them.

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, one

can not

cannot

get all latest news through the social media. Sometimes talking with others personally, they can gain some knowledge, even they can learn something identical from the others. To conclude with,

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there are a

alot

(often followed by 'of') a large number or amount or extent

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of benefits of being

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socialized

, the negative impact of

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overweighted

usually describes a large person who is fat but has a large frame to carry it

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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250 words

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Nowadays, more people are choosing to socialize online rather than face to face. Is this a positive or negative development?

Fully explain your ideas

Many people think that zoos are cruel. Others think they are helpful in protecting rare animals. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

Some people think that universities should not provide so much theoretical knowledge but give more practical training throughout their courses. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people consider price as most important thing to think about when buying product (such as cell phone) or service (e.g. medical treatment). Do you agree or disagree?