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The charts below show three types of police reports from the city of Johnstown in 2016, along with Johnstown’s average monthly temperature. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show three types of police reports from the city of Johnstown in 2016, along with Johnstown’s average monthly temperature. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart represents the comparison between three different kinds of police
reports
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 from the city
Johnstown
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 in 2016. Another chart depicts the average monthly temperature in celsius of the city of
Johntown
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Johnstown
. It is observed that the least frequent
offense
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offence
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 recorded is
noise
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a noise
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complaint
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complaints
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. It is seen that theft
reports
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 were significantly
less
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fewer
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 between the
months
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 of
January
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 to March for theft
reports
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,
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 lesser noise complaints were registered between the
months
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 of
January
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 to march and traffic violations were committed the least between the
months
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 of July and September. The hike in these police
reports
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 was seen between the
months
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 of July to September, April to June and
January
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 to march for theft, noise
complains
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complaints
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 and traffic
violation
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violations
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, respectively. From the
second
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graph
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 it can be visualized that the temperature starts at its lowest which is around
0.25 degree
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0.25-degree
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 celsius in the month of
January
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 and keeps increasing almost steadily till it reaches its peak in the month of
july
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July
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to
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at
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 25 degree Celsius. After
july
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July
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 a rapid fall
of
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in
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 temperature is observed for the rest of the
months
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Vocabulary: Replace the words reports, months, january with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • data representation
  • crime rate
  • monthly variations
  • correlation
  • theft
  • vandalism
  • assault
  • seasonal trends
  • temperature fluctuations
  • peak
  • decline
  • law enforcement
  • civil disorder
  • statistical analysis
  • public safety
  • climatic influence
  • incidence rate
  • aggregate data
  • preventative measures
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