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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 254 words.

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It is believed by some that marketing campaigns have a huge influence on today's consumers and affect their buying habits, making them spend money on products they may not in real need for.While others feel that it is necessary to be aware of new products. I completely agree that people should have the ability to know all products. In
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 to today's busy lifestyle consumers don't have enough time to go shopping and check a catalogue. They may be run through an advertisement of a new product on YouTube while watching certain videos on YouTube or browsing various websites that may help them to achieve more results or save more time by using that product. A
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 reason for my opinion is that advertisements work for the well off consumers by accelerating the expansion of the market and increasing the competition between companies which will end up with better product quality
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after-sale service, and reduced prices. A final reason in support of my view is the fact that hundreds of thousands of people are working in the advertising industry and it offers a number of jobs yearly helping the government to reduce the increasing number of unemployment. In conclusion, I completely agree with the opinion that advertising is very crucial in our modern life
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 for the knowledge it provides for new products and the increasing offered benefits for consumers,
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 to providing several job opportunities for creative people.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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