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People today spend less and less time interacting with other people in their neighborhood and this has a negative impact on communities. What are the possible causes and solutions to this problem?

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There is no denying to the notion that in
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 modern world, individuals have very slighter or no connection to their neighbours which hold negative effect on the society. Vast usage of social media could be the one cause
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for
of
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 increasing issue. So, to resolve
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 problem organisations can help the people by taking necessary steps. The primary reason is that with the development of
technology it
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technology, it
 becomes easy for everyone to use social media. Individuals are spending long hours on
internet
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the internet
 by using various applications. In spite, human beings make so many acquaintances on Facebook, Instagram but does not know who is living to their
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 door. Another factor is that people have
smaller amount
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a smaller amount
 of time to socialise with others. Everyone is so busy to make their life better. People work days and nights to get success and to make good money so that they can provide a better life for their children. Every problem comes with solutions. The
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 and foremost method is that government should organise some community events where people can gather, know each other, make friends and plan some activities together.
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,
government
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the government
 should make more public places
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 as parks, community centres where folks can sit together and know their neighbours. In conclusion,
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 is a serious matter and should be resolved in a short term. People should know their neighbours as it is important as they can help them in their difficult times.
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, the above-mentioned solutions can help to bring individuals closer.
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