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Eating meat is harmful to the health. Do you agree or disagree?

#meat #health
As population increases, people started to
look other options
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look into other options
 apart from fruits and vegetables. It is said by many people that consuming flesh is dangerous for the person's
well-being
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Well-being
. I strongly agree with the given statement. In my opinion,
meat
 creates digestion problems,
harmonal
of or relating to or caused by hormones
hormonal
disbalance
 and many viruses can enter into our
body
 through
meat
.
To begin
 with,
meat
 is dangerous to our
body
 as if we consume
this
 our stomach and other
body
 parts need to work more to digest it.
Meat usually
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Meat, usually
 takes more than 2 hours to digest compared to green vegetables, which takes only 30 minutes.
Moreover
, it is scientifically proven that
human
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the human body
body
is not mean
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is not meant
does not mean
doesn't mean
 to eat flesh.
Secondly
, as population
incraeses
become bigger or greater in amount
increases
increased
 day by day, people started to produce
meat
 via chemicals, which is no less than
possion
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a passion
passion
poison
passions
 for our
body
.
Furthermore
, Farm owners
gives
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give
injection
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injections
 to animals so they can gain weight quickly;
consequently
 they grow
fastly
with rapid movements
quickly
. Farm owners sale them into
market
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the market
, which is
extremly
to a high degree or extent; favorably or with much respect
extremely
 harmful for us.
For example
,
last
 year, In
china
a communist nation that covers a vast territory in eastern Asia; the most populous country in the world
China
, more than 100 cases of illness
was repoted
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were reported
was reported
 in the hospital and when the government
investigate
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investigates
, they found that people consumed
meat
, which was given
harmonal injection
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a hormonal injection
hormonal injection
the hormonal injection
.
Finally
, various types of viruses can enter into our
body
, if we consume flesh. Animals have many
type
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types
 of small
particals
(nontechnical usage) a tiny piece of anything
particles
 and when
a
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an
 individual
eat
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eats
meat
 they enter into
person's
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a person's body
the person's body
body
.
Latest
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The latest
 example of
this
 is COVID-19. Many
scientist
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scientists
has proved
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have proven
 that
this
 virus enter into human
body
 due to eating bats. To conclude, our
body
 is mean to consume organic and naturally grown fruits and vegetables. In my opinion, many
disease
Suggestion
diseases
such
 as digestion system,
harmonal
of or relating to or caused by hormones
hormonal
 problem can
ocuure
come to pass
occur
 in our
body
, if we consuming
meat
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • chronic diseases
  • balanced diet
  • nutritional deficiencies
  • plant-based diet
  • ethical concerns
  • environmental impact
  • deforestation
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • sustainable
  • Vitamin B12
  • processed meat substitutes
  • social and cultural implications
  • mitigate
  • full-time vegetarian
  • plant-based options
  • health benefits
  • commit to vegetarianism
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