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Many Museums charge for admission while others do not. Do you think that the advantages of charging people into the museum out weights the disadvantages ?

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Nowadays, most of the public buildings are charged visit bill by the people.
Similarly
, most of historical museums are levying charges from tourists as their receipt. I opine that it's a positive development because it acts like a source of earning for local administration.
However
,
this
 essay will discuss the pros and cons of
this
 statement. On the one side, it is beneficial for the government when they
charge
Suggestion
have charged
 visiting price from the viewers since it the great source of revenue for the government. With the help of
this
 regime can greatly increase their recipes in their annual financial budget.
Moreover
, local authorities can easily incur the sundry charges of the building
such
 as Repair and maintenance cost, Electricity charges, Wages of employees et cetera.
Hence
, building management will not put pressure on authorities to raise their budget to maintain annual charges. Despite of the advantages, undoubtedly, there are some disadvantages of charging money as a visitor cost by the authorities of the public museum. The
first
 and the foremost cons of charging expense is it can impose a detrimental effect on the counting of visitors who are interested to visit. When any public building charges, any payment from the traveller they will not come in countless numbers. The visiting will change to a few numbers from day because no local people want to pay any charges to see historical buildings.
As a result
, the building becomes useless because of less tourists. To sum up,
Although
, most of the sightseer places are free nowadays some museums are charging fees for a visit. It is a positive view if they are charging some consideration from the visitor because it does not impose extra burden on the management to maintain the annual charges of the building.
Moreover
, visitors will get extra conventional facilities if they pay visiting fees.
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